Hi 7th hour!

Today at Writers Week we saw the following student presenters:  Nicole Pfister; Hanna Cushing; Emily Kivland; Insiya Syed; Kristina Chen; Jayne DePaolis; Jared Swenson; Imama Khawaja.


Choose at least three of these writers and write about what you liked best about their writing/presentation.  Give specific details from their presentation to clearly illustrate what you liked/admired.  “She was good” is NOT enough of a response here!

Again, read what people ahead of you have already written about and see if you can come up with something new as well as responding directly to what people have already written.

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Emily Kivlan is one of my favorite writers I've seen this week. One reason I liked her performance was how confident she was and how she memorized her poems. Also, I really liked her first piece about how we are artist and our life is art. She made amazing points about how when we fall and crumble, we try to make new art out of the rubble and make something new out of it. People mess up all the time and we try to learn from mistakes to make us better. She was really into what she was saying and I could truly tell she how passionate she was about her writing.
Nicole Pfister's reading of her diary entries were really interesting. It made the crowd laugh with her stories from when she was young, but she turned them into a lesson that everyone of all ages can use. Each diary entry was short, but she made them really meaningful which I really enjoyed.
Insiya Syed read a really funny piece about how to be perfect for a brown man. The more I thought about it the more I realized the only reason it was funny, was because she was telling us that you had to be a certain way and you can't be flawless to marry one of these men. In our society people like to tell others it's ok to have flaws and you don't have to look skinny to be attractive which is a good thing to tell others. But if a guy told us how he wanted his girl or how his mom wanted a certain type of girl for her son, we would think they are rude and disrespectful. Even if she didn't mean for this to happen, I really like how her writing made me think more about society.
1. I liked Insiya Syed the most. For one thing, I liked her confidence when speaking. She didn't seem nervous and delivered the speech effectively. But most of all, I liked the humor and sarcastic tone in her speech. Her use of the term "brown people" throughout the speech mocked the stereotypes and slang we use today, which made her speech relatable and understandable. My favorite part was probably when she said, "It's not what's in the inside that counts. It's what's on the outside that counts," which effectively added humor to her presentation. Like Kayla said, in our society, we are told to appreciate the opposite, so that just made this speech even funnier.

2. I also liked Nicole Pfister's presentation. While her reflections on her diary entries at the beginning were funny, like her regrets on picking a certain Eggo product, I like how she somehow managed to turn those into lessons/morals for herself and the audience. Through her diary entries, I could see an actual change in her thinking and her growth in character even through just a few entries. I admired her ability to turn her experiences, even her very early ones, into an essential life lessons to be learned, making it a deep, thought-provoking speech.

3. Imama Khawaja was also another good performer. Her poem titled something like "A Love Letter to the World" was pretty inspiring and uplifting. She started out on a sad note talking about how she was sad she was to start her senior year, how she didn't want to leave, and was a person who didn't adapt to change well. However, she turned it into a poem that was meant for the reader/audience. She dedicated the poem to everyone, even those she didn't know, and captured a grateful tone that made me feel kind of appreciated, even though I didn't know her personally. It was a warm poem, and I felt it's warmth all the way in the upper half of section C.
I really liked Natalie Pfister's two pieces. Her piece about her diary was really unique. I liked how she read one passage and then said what she learned looking back at it. I thought that her message was really inspiring to young women and really anyone who listened to her. Her second piece also really inspired me. It showed how it is okay to conform to stereotypes sometimes because they can be comforting.
I also really enjoyed Isniya's piece on how to marry a brown man. I thought it was really good because she combined humor and commenting on pressures that are placed on young women. I really liked her piece because she was relating certain unrealistic qualities that society values in a humorous way. I really liked how she didn't really ever say that these traits were not necessary for everyone to have but you could tell that her message was that it is okay to be whoever you are and you can have flaws.
I really liked Jared Swenson's poems. I thought that they all taught good lessons that were important for people to know. I especially liked his poem about knowing someone is there for you. It really conveyed a good message that not everyone knows. I really think that it is important for people to know that there is always someone that they can turn to when they are feeling down. I really liked that Jared incorporated good lessons into his poetry.
1. My favorite performance during 7th hour was Emily Kivland. Her second poem was about the violence that we all encounter when watching the news or hearing about events from other people. It seems like everywhere I turn these days, someone has been shot, murdered, or has committed suicide. We live in a world full of violence, yet we are also blessed to live in a decently safe community. Emily's point was that since we live in a nice town, we are prone to forgetting how close the violence really is and how the crime on the screen of our television has caused a human heart to stop beating. It was a powerful message to remember that people who fall victim to violence are real human beings just like us and that that could happen to any one of us as well.

2. Nicole Pfister also was enjoyable to listen to as she recollected on her diary from years prior. She made a statement about appearance and how no matter what society says or what you may think it says, you are perfect in your own way. Once you accept that you have been created to perfection, you can live a life of happiness. It is a message that is always a great reminder, especially to teenagers who can be unhealthily addicted to trying to fit into society.

3. I also really enjoyed Imama Khawaja's poetry. Her poems seemed to be written from someone much older and wiser, yet it was only a mere high school student who created true pieces of art. You could sense her maturity by certain lines of her poems that flowed effortlessly. My favorite poem was the one titled "High". She interpreted the word high a few different ways, such as in an airplane or on a balcony, and tied them all together. Each way that was interpreted was described without using the actual word (such as "airplane") but with thorough details so we could understand what she was talking about. She used strikingly strong imagery to paint pictures in our minds of what she was saying through lots and lots of details. I was very impressed by her outstanding artistic ability and overall performance.

Also on a side note, Paige - I don't know if you're going to see this and I don't really know you or your sister real well, but your song 8th period today literally had me in tears. You are SUCH a good singer! You rocked it girl!

I especially liked Nicole Pfister's piece about her reminiscing her childhood through her diary. It was sprinkled with humor but had a happy, heart-lightening message at the end, which was nice. I loved her energy and bubbly voice when she talked, and it was very clear that she was happy to be presenting. Her comments about her crush situation was very entertaining and provided a valuable life lesson that someone that likes you simply because of your physical appearance is not the one for you, which I found surprisingly accurate and will definitely apply this to my life. I also thought it was kind of amazing that she kept a journal from second grade to now! It makes me regret that I didn't start and that I'm missing out on valuable opinions from my 8 year old self and memories that I may have forgotten about.

I also found Imama Khawaja's performance very interesting, especially her reflections of high school. I remember her saying that "high school isn't forever" and that senior year is very emotionally taxing on her, which I thought was peculiar. So many high school students rush through high school and miss out on so many valuable opportunities, running through the motions and not taking advantage of this time, and other students take high school so seriously that they don't develop any friendships or anything outside of high school and waste these four years. Her poems were well-written and her "Love Letter to the World" really gave me the feels and was so uplifting and inspiring, which I thought was a nice change (after yesterday's speaker who spoke on death and isolation).

I appreciated Insiya Syed's piece as well, with its mild jokes and humorous tutorial of how to get a 'brown man.' I enjoyed the overall performance, but I also noticed hints of scorn and sarcastic undertones, which maybe suggested that Insiya herself rejected the system and thought the marriage policies of choosing brides based off of 'auntie' opinions on a female's appearance are silly and trivial. Especially now, with the surge of feminism the nation is undergoing and the freedom of marriage that has emerged, such customs may eventually be overwhelmed, I predict, as women and young girls gain power to be more than the roles society expects them to fill.

1.I really enjoyed Insiya Syed's performance on how to marry a "brown guy". I think that it was funny because the way she described the "perfect girl". This vision is impossible to attain and unrealistic to wish for. Her exaggeration was what made her performance so entertaining. Although she was exaggerating I think that there is some truth behind what she said. Most girls would like to look beautiful and want to fit into society. I also liked how confident she seemed and how she did some accents, this made her piece more interesting to listen to.
2.I liked the poems that Emily Kivland wrote. I think she put in a lot of work to memorize her poems and it really showed when she presented today. She seemed very confident and her body language was interactive with the audience. Her poem about violence was very true and easy to relate to. I agree with her that whenever we watch the news there is always something about a murder or death. I think that she is trying to say that just because the murder or killing happened somewhere else, it can't be ignored. Her point is that everyone's life is valuable and that these murders shouldn't go unnoticed.
3.Another performance I enjoyed was by Imama Khawaja. Her poem, "A Love Letter to the World ", was something I could relate to. In two years we will be graduating from Fremd and going our own ways to different colleges all around the United States. It will be hard for us to move on and readjust to a new setting. Imama did a wonderful job of portraying this fear in her poem. It was nice that she ended the poem on a happy note and dedicated her poem to everyone at Fremd. Her overall confidence was good. I was impressed at how easily she could read her poem when we had extra time at the end.
One of my favorite performers seventh hour was Insiya Syed. She seemed to be a natural at public speaking and making an audience laugh. I thought her topic was very creative and humorous, but most of all I liked her tone towards the topic. I admired the way she rejected what was probably her family's traditional system, and thought for herself what she wanted in life. She is most likely surrounded by people in her home that think very highly of her culture's system, but she is able to very successfully support her opinions.

I also really enjoyed Natalie Pfister's piece. Her writing had great personality and humor which was very enjoyable for the audience to listen to. I loved the way she tied it in to how teenagers all think now. When Natalie was young, she thought everyone was beautiful, but now it seems most teenagers are trying to look and act a certain way that society views as beautiful. I really admired the meaning of this piece and the way it was presented.

Another presentor I really enjoyed was Emily Kivland, specifically her poem about the killings and blood. As a member of the audience, I could feel her emotion and passion from my seat. It was obvious Emily had rehearsed this poem so many times. She had such great body language and there was something about the way she read her poem that made it all flow together.
1. My favorite presenter of the day would probably have to be Insiya Syed. Most people who think about marriage worry about the partner they're going to pick, not about their parents. I had never considered the irrational expectations one's future mother-in-law might have for them. I appreciated how anyone could find the writing enjoyable, not just "brown people." Inisya did a great job at conveying the humor she had written in her piece. I probably had a smile on my face the whole time she recited her reading. Don't get me wrong, I like poetry, especially the poems we heard today, but it was nice to get a break from them for a little while. Poems are typically more dramatic and have deeper meanings woven into them. It was fun to break up the serious vibe and instead just sit back, listen, and laugh.

2. Another presenter I loved was Emily Kivland. I really like the line she said, "All blood is red." To me, it demonstrated how everyone may have differences, but on the inside everyone is the same. All your blood is red just like your neighbor's blood, your siblings blood, and even the blood of your worst enemy. I think it was her stage presence that made the piece even more powerful. You can just tell by taking one look at her body language that she is so passionate about what she wrote. I also commend her for being able to memorize that whole piece.

3. Native Pfister was another writer I enjoyed. The idea of using a journal from her childhood is so creative in itself that it caught my immediate attention. I loved hearing about things through the mind of a child. I remember her saying something along the lines of, "I knew that I shouldn't be with a boy who I only liked for only his looks." I think this showed how intuitive children can be and how some can be wiser than they let on. Not all kids are naive and clueless, sometimes they can grasp certain concepts on their own. I admired how she was able to take some of the random ramblings that every kid can have and turn them into something we all could relate to today as teenagers and adults.
1. My favorite presenter today would defenitely be Insiya Syed. Her content and her confidence was incredible. She was very bold and presented her writing without stuttering. Her content was extremely relatable and she was very sarcastic when she was presenting it. I also enjoyed it very much because I knew and have experienced what she was talking about. When I was in India, I have watched many movies where the groom's mother are similar to how Insiya characterized the mothers as. I have met people who are shallow and look for girls who are just beautiful. I knew what song she was talking about, the fair and lovely cream she pointed out, and the problems with being profoundly tall or extremely short. I was able to really enjoy her presentation because of experiencing those situations. Even though she exaggerated it a little bit, it was humorous and entertaining.
2. Another presenter that I really enjoyed was Jared Swenson. Even though all of his poems were motivating and similar, I loved the poem "The real key to success". It was very encouraging and hopeful. It showed me that there are always people to help you and that you are not alone. Just like what Grace said, Jared conveyed a beautiful message that not everybody was aware of.
3. I also enjoyed Imama's poetry, "A love letter", because it was very emotional and exhilarating. It was also relatable because I had those similar feelings when I had to move here from India. I felt the exact same way Imama felt, when I knew I was going to leave all of my friends, family, and my school behind. Just like Ellyce said, she dedicated her poem to everyone else, including strangers. I also loved the way she presented it. She was very reserved at the beginning, but then she started to follow her poem and continued presenting with courage and gratitude.
1. I really enjoyed Nicole Pfister's piece. I loved how she used entries from her diary to portray a very important message that everyone is beautiful. It made me laugh and those are the kind of pieces that really make me enjoy writers week. I love how she used her once serious diary entries, and turned them into something she can now laugh about. I love how she tied them into a topic that she is really passionate about, it really got my attention. I also appreciated that she kept the diary entries short because sometimes when the pieces are too long, the audience tends to zone out and not pay as much attention. She looked really confident and had a really bold voice I really enjoyed it.
2. Emily Kivland was such a good performer. I loved that she used the stage and used hand gestures to really connect her poems to the audience. It gave a real echoing effect that resonated throughout the auditorium. I loved her piece "All Blood is Red" I feel as though everywhere you look today there is either murder or violence happening. We live in a world of violence but sometimes forget because we are concealed by our little town. I love how it was different than any other piece in writers week. It wasn't about depression or it wasn't a funny story, like most of the pieces in writers week. Not that the other things are not important but violence is a very big problem that most people choose not to achknowledge. I give her credit for writing something on a theme that not many people in writers week talk about.
3. Insiya Syed had a very funny and differnent piece. I enjoyed this a lot because in writers week people usually start off funny saying you have to be perfect, but then they say just kidding it's okay to have flaws. I like how she was different than the rest and made the whole piece funny. Im glad that it was different than other pieces at writers week. I really liked all her detail about how you have to be perfect to get a brown guy. Even though it was funny, it was also a reflection on society on how these standards are actually true. We laugh about it but neglect to notice that we actually do have certain standards and prejudice towards people. We judge on people on appearance. She wrote her piece on a topic that everyone hates to admit that they are a victim of too. Apart of me during her whole performance was waiting for her to tell us that it was okay to be unique, but she never did. By neglecting this she showed actually most people judge on appearance even when they do not want or try to. It's human nature and it is a serious problem.

1. Nicole Pfister was one of my favorite speakers from today’s performances! Her diary entries from when she was in elementary school reminded me of my own entries when I used to journal about my day too. I love reliving my memories from childhood and being able to laugh at myself for being so innocent. To me, her writing was very relatable because when I think of the past, I tend to wonder how much I have grown since my younger days. When she took quotes from her different years in elementary school, I was interested in having an insight on the speaker herself. I was also impressed that she was very open towards the audience and willing for us to laugh along with her on her trip down memory lane. I especially liked her addition of an entry from her senior year. I thought it was a creative way to show how, just like in elementary school, she is simply living her life and the mistakes she makes today are future lessons that she may look back upon in many years to come.

2. Emily Kivland was another favorite because of her unique writing style! With her first piece, I was amazed on how she represented life as art. Personally I envisioned myself with a slab of clay that has been chiseled, painted, chipped, and cracked in multiple spots where my memories and experiences have molded me into who I am today. It was interesting to hear her say that sometimes others can ruin our art, how at times the paint could be removed, but the new surface is simply a blank canvas where new paintings can be drawn. It was inspiring to see life in a new perspective where brokenness is an opportunity to rebuild, and how everyone’s life is a unique, irreplaceable piece of art. I was immersed by the visuals of her writings and very impressed by her diction to capture the complexities of life into a constantly changing piece of art.

3. I also really enjoyed Insiya Syed’s performance because of her use of humor to lighten the mood in the auditorium from the previous presentations. I was also impressed by her on-stage charisma and how she seemed to be enjoying herself, as well. I thought it was great that she approached the topic similar to a tutorial and how it also educated the audience, in a way, of “brown” culture. I thought it was quite clever that she used accents to go into a character of a mother. It was obvious to me that she put a lot of preparation towards her presentation, and her jokes were spot on! Her “procedure” on how to seek a mother’s approval also prompted me to compare and contrast the different standards all of the other cultures around the world try to uphold. Since, ultimately, mothers are trying to find the best spouse for their child, her approval will be well earned if he/she can meet her own high standards. Although possibly not intended, I liked thinking in a bigger picture of the different standards people hold around the world.

1. I really like Natalie Pfister's story about her growing up. It took me back to when I was little. I loved the format too. The way each part of the story started and ended was cool. Going from her life and what she could learn from it was awesome. It engaged me and really made me think about what mistakes I have made and how to fix them. I really liked the idea of learning from my mistakes and the way she read her writing made it sound like she has done just that.
2. The second reader I liked was Jared's message about feeling alone and depressed. I can say I know Jared but after hearing his reading I'm not so sure. I had no idea about these things he had pent up inside. But I feel that they relayed a message. That message is also a very good one. People are never alone and I think his poems truly made me never feel alone.
3. The reader who I thought was the funniest was Insiya. So far my favorite writers week topics are the funny how to's. Her reading really lightened the mood after some serious topics and I thought it was hilarious. Sarcastic and dry humor was great because I tend to give jokes like that as well. My favorite part was how no matter what girls cannot please their hopefully soon to be mother in laws. I don't know why but her topic just made me laugh. She seemed especially calm and collected while she was speaking which i think is the most important part of reading aloud.


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